This is a true example of how a person really wants to travel the world coast to coast. There could've been some detail in the wind, like how strong it was, but no biggie! Keep it up.
You managed to put a lot of emotion into three lines, which is difficult. I would add a comma and a dash like this:"I wish, no- I pray" or some other kind of punctuation to clarify it. I hope you add more poems.
Oh My Gosh! I loved it. I really can relate to it. It's like my thoughts sometimes. Small towns can majorly suck but you know you can get through it. Just think, you're close to moving away age. LUCKY! ~K~
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This is a true example of how a person really wants to travel the world coast to coast. There could've been some detail in the wind, like how strong it was, but no biggie! Keep it up.
Hey Threasa! i love the way you write! its so real, in everything you do, keep it up!
that showed your feelings well and it was strong although it was short nice job!
You managed to put a lot of emotion into three lines, which is difficult. I would add a comma and a dash like this:"I wish, no- I pray" or some other kind of punctuation to clarify it. I hope you add more poems.
I like it. Small towns....how scary. Seriously.
Oh My Gosh! I loved it. I really can relate to it. It's like my thoughts sometimes. Small towns can majorly suck but you know you can get through it. Just think, you're close to moving away age. LUCKY!
~K~
yeah i think that this small town is driving everyone mad. good job, only 18 days left.
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